Write a letter to a friend. You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. Apologize for damaging product Explain what happened Say how are you going to fix the issue

Dear Misha Hope you are doing well and I am writing to apologize for damaging
your
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laptop
that I borrowed from you
last
weekend. I promise
to
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you that I will fix the issue. I am very sorry for
this
event and you just can't imagine how terrible I feel about it. I know your
laptop
was new and you
have
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received it for your birthday.
Last
morning I worked on your
laptop
and finished writing a long assignment. But after
that
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I
forgot
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left
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your
laptop
in the living room on the table.
Then
my little brother came to
living
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room to play
his
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with his
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toys, he saw the
laptop
, pushed
hardly
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on the keyboard and dropped it down. So that's why your gadget's keyboard
get
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broken. So, just give me a few days and I will take your
laptop
to the electronic device repair shop and I can get it fixed
with
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new
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keyboard for your gadget. I hope you
would
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not be so angry with me after that.
Your
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faithfully Pulat
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task achievement
Task response could be improved by elaborating more on the circumstances, as well as offering a more concrete plan for compensation or repair of the damaged item.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, consider adding more linking words or phrases to connect ideas more smoothly, and ensure that each new idea starts with a new paragraph.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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