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Some parents prefer homeschooling their children rather than sending them to traditional schools. What are the advantages and disadvantages of homeschooling?

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There are many paths of education for
children
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 nowadays. Some parents choose homeschooling over enrolling their kids to
schools
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 and drawbacks of homeschooling. On the one hand, a homeschooling program has many benefits;one of them is to provide young boys and girls with a flexible curriculum and a wide range of lesson materials that they prefer to learn. There are no specific targets on how much kids should achieve as required in standard
schools
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syllabus
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.
Assesment
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Assessment
 given in homeschool is likely
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 than labelling students with a fail or pass result.
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, most materials are designed to the young's preference.
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, if a teenager loves to learn social subjects more than numbers, the modules and exercises will be focused more
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 shaping his/her ability
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 knowledge in their
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preferred
 area. As
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 result,
children
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 are given
freedom
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the freedom
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 to study based on their interests.
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, unlike what common
schools
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 have,
homeschooling's
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homeschooling
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 pupils lack
of
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apply
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time to interact and socialise with their peers.
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most
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major disadvantage of
homeschool
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homeschooling
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 for
children
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 which might be a barrier
for
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to
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 their future.
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, a homeschooling boy might struggle
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 and
accepting
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accept
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 arguments since he never
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involved
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 in discussion-based learning. Another case is,
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kid who learns privately at home can have difficulties in socializing and making new friends.
The homeschooling
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 does not cover some soft skills that students need in the future, and the examples above can hinder them later ar their workplaces. In conclusion, homeschooling exists to fill the gaps
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what
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that
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 are missing in conservative
schools
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,
such
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 as the flexibility to choose lessons that
what
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apply
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they want.
However
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, it
also
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 comes with some
hinderences
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hindrances
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inability
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the inability
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 of the program to facilitate
children
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 in
social
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the social
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aspect
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aspects
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and stick closely to that topic without digressing to maintain strong coherence.
coherence cohesion
Use more varied linking words and phrases to improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
Support your main points with more specific and detailed examples to give the reader a better understanding of the arguments.
task achievement
Be careful with minor grammatical errors and pay attention to article use ('the young's preference' should be 'young learners' preferences'), subject-verb agreement, and preposition use.
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