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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart illustrates the total number of
minutes
 in
billions
 of telephone calls in the
UK
 and
divided
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is divided
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 into three call categories which are local-fixed
line
 , national and international-fixed
line
 and mobiles( all calls ) from between 1995 and 2002 .
Overall
, the local-fixed
line
 call type in the
UK
 marked the higher number in
billions
 compared to other call categories.
It is clear that
 since 1995
local-fixed
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the local
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line
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lines
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grew
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have grown
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 considerably and reached
the
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a
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 peak point at 90
minutes
 in
billions
 in 1999 but
begin
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began
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 to
dropped
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 and ended
to
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at
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 72
minutes
 in
billions
 in 2002.Meanwhile, the national and
international-fixed
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international fixed
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line
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lines
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 in the
UK
 showed positive trends and grew steadily since 1995 with started point at 38
minutes
 in
billions
 until reached
the
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a
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 peak point at 62
minutes
 in
billions
 in 2002.
In addition
, in 1995 the mobile ( all calls ) in the
UK
 started at the lower figure with 5
minutes
 in
billions
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billion
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 and slowly went up gradually to 48
minutes
 in
billions
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billion
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 in 2001 but slightly decreased in
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the figure
a figure
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figure
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figures
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 in 2002 with 45
minutes
 in
bilion
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billion
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billions, uk, line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommunications
  • landline
  • mobile phones
  • local calls
  • national and international calls
  • billion
  • minutes
  • growth
  • decrease
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • overtake
  • peak
  • plummet
  • steady
  • significant
  • minor
  • chart
  • period
  • comparison
  • category
  • data
  • illustrate
  • reveal
  • indicate
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