the following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. summarize the information and make comparison. writ at least 150 words

the following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. summarize the information and make comparison. writ at least 150 words
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The given bar chart gives information about various ways
which
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individuals chose for
traveling
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travelling
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to work and back
to
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home, in a town in Europe, in the years 1960, 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that all the modes of transport experienced a downward trend except for
car
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cars
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.
In addition
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, the number of people who rode to work
were
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the most in 2000. Looking at the details, there was a sharp increase in the percentage of using
car
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cars
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, it started at just above 5% in 1960 and peaked at approximately 35% in 2000. As for
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the bus
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bus
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buses
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,
it
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they
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saw a
fluctuation
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trend and decreased from nearly 17
percent
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in 1960 to slightly more than 15 in 2000. Turning to other types of carrying, the figure for persons who went to work
by
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foot was just above 35 at the beginning of the duration and it witnessed a falling trend to about 10
percent
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.
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Also
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the population of
bike
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bikes
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levelled off at
alittle
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a little
above 5
at the end
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of the period.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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