some say that increasing price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pu0llution problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
High
prevalence of using motorized vehicles results in heavy Correct article usage
The high
traffic
, and air and noise pollution in city centers
, Change the spelling
centres
hence
some people
offer to increase oil
price
to reduce the high demand for operating motorized vehicles. Since Fix the agreement mistake
prices
this
process may result in unexpected troubles in suburban areas, and may put a
pressure on the budgets of Remove the article
apply
people
, I disagree with this
idea.
One of the reason
why increasing Change to a plural noun
reasons
oil
price
should not be embraced as an effective solution is Fix the agreement mistake
prices
this
approach may adversely affect individuals, who reside in suburban areas. To illustrate, some people
prefer to live in
far away from the city Change preposition
apply
centers
, in order to escape from the hustle and bustle of Change the spelling
centres
the
city life. Correct article usage
apply
As a result
, they have to drive or take a bus for their daily commute. It can be easily stated that in case of an incline in the oil
price
, these people
's expenditures rise dramatically. Moreover
, some of them may decide to quit with the aim of saving money. For instance
, nearly 40 people
resigned last
month in Istanbul due to
fact
that expenses related to everyday Correct article usage
the fact
commute
almost doubled in the Fix the agreement mistake
commutes
last
two months. To sum up
, rising oil
price
may alleviate the Fix the agreement mistake
prices
traffic
jam
as Fix the agreement mistake
jams
people
tend to quit to drive
, but Change the verb form
driving
this
approach may end up in unemployment, for that reason, I do not support this
idea.
On the other hand
, increasing price
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the price
oil
leads to Change preposition
of oil
rise
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a rise
transportation
fees, in turn, every Change preposition
in transportation
items'
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item's
price
on shelves is likely to go up. To examplify
, as companies have to pay more for fuel for lorries, they tend to increase the Correct your spelling
exemplify
price
of the products, in order to make profit
. Add an article
a profit
As a consequence
, customers may face overprized items in supermarkets. For example
, the price
of cartoon milks
has been increasing significantly in recent years, owing to Change the wording
milk
kinds of milk
bowls of milk
pints of milk
glasses of milk
war
between Russia and Ukraine. If Correct article usage
the war
authoritites
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authorities
rise
the Correct your spelling
raise
oil
price
in order to reduce the
pollution or Correct article usage
apply
traffic
, the pressure on citizen's budget
, inevitably, peaks. Fix the agreement mistake
budgets
Therefore
, governments should not impelement
policies for increasing Correct your spelling
implement
oil
price
.
Fix the agreement mistake
prices
To conclude
, while
some believe that increasing petrol
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the petrol
price
would be be most effective way to address heavy traffic
and pollution, I personally do not support this
idea since this
approach may result in more serious situations including unemployment, and financial strain among
society.Change preposition
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task achievement
Ensure a clear position throughout the essay; maintain consistency in argumentation regarding the extent of agreement or disagreement.
task achievement
Try to expand on the examples given, ensuring that they are fully developed and detailed to support your main points.
coherence and cohesion
Work on creating more cohesive devices and transition phrases to better link ideas and paragraphs together.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure the introduction and conclusion mirror each other in stating your viewpoint and summarizing the main argument.
task achievement
Avoid general statements and strive for more precision in the language, avoiding ambiguity.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.