some say that increasing price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pu0llution problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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prevalence of using motorized vehicles results in heavy
traffic
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, and air and noise pollution in city
centers
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,
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some
people
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offer to increase
oil
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price
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prices
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to reduce the high demand for operating motorized vehicles. Since
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process may result in unexpected troubles in suburban areas, and may put
a
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pressure on the budgets of
people
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, I disagree with
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idea. One of the
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why increasing
oil
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price
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prices
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should not be embraced as an effective solution is
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approach may adversely affect individuals, who reside in suburban areas. To illustrate, some
people
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prefer to live
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far away from the city
centers
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, in order to escape from the hustle and bustle of
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city life.
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, they have to drive or take a bus for their daily commute. It can be easily stated that in case of an incline in the
oil
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price
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, these
people
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's expenditures rise dramatically.
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, some of them may decide to quit with the aim of saving money.
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, nearly 40
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resigned
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month in Istanbul
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fact
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that expenses related to everyday
commute
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commutes
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almost doubled in the
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two months.
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, rising
oil
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price
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prices
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may alleviate the
traffic
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jam
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as
people
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tend to quit
to drive
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, but
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approach may end up in unemployment, for that reason, I do not support
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idea.
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, increasing
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price
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the price
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oil
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of oil
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leads to
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a rise
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transportation
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fees, in turn, every
items'
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item's
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price
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on shelves is likely to go up. To
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exemplify
, as companies have to pay more for fuel for lorries, they tend to increase the
price
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of the products, in order to make
profit
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a profit
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.
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, customers may face overprized items in supermarkets.
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, the
price
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of cartoon
milks
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milk
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has been increasing significantly in recent years, owing to
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the war
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between Russia and Ukraine. If
authoritites
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authorities
rise
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raise
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the
oil
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price
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in order to reduce
the
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apply
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pollution or
traffic
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, the pressure on citizen's
budget
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budgets
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, inevitably, peaks.
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, governments should not
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implement
policies for increasing
oil
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price
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prices
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.
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,
while
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some believe that increasing
petrol
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the petrol
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price
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would be be most effective way to address heavy
traffic
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and pollution, I personally do not support
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idea since
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approach may result in more serious situations including unemployment, and financial strain
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in
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society.
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task achievement
Ensure a clear position throughout the essay; maintain consistency in argumentation regarding the extent of agreement or disagreement.
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Try to expand on the examples given, ensuring that they are fully developed and detailed to support your main points.
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coherence and cohesion
Ensure the introduction and conclusion mirror each other in stating your viewpoint and summarizing the main argument.
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Avoid general statements and strive for more precision in the language, avoiding ambiguity.

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