In many countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. Do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?

Nowadays, fast
foods
are becoming cheaper day-by-day
,
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and widespread in some countries.
Although
there are some
advantages
of
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these
types
of
foods
, some key disadvantages can outweigh them. On the one hand, some
people
think that merits are more than demerits, and all of these
advantages
help
people
to spend less
time
to eat
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.
Firstly
, we spend less
time
to eat
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these
types
of
foods
,
this
can be an opportunity for us to work both hard and much
time
.
Secondly
,
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fast
foods
are very convenient to eat compared to our natural
foods
because, if we want to eat natural one, we should allocate some place but with fast
foods
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we need not choose any place where we can eat these
types
of
foods
in any place
such
as on the way or
while
going to school.
On the other hand
, I believe that the key disadvantages of fast food can outweigh the
advantages
.
Firstly
, a high amount of consumption can damage our power because
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a lot of chemicals are used in junk
foods
. These can damage our both health and healthy lifestyle.
Secondly
, high amounts of
people
are choosing fast food as the right food to eat
as a result
they cannot spend quality
time
with their parents because, some older
people
do not like these
types
of
foods
, and the centers of fast
foods
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food
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are located far from our house. In conclusion, I believe that there are colossal amounts of disadvantages which are key reasons to dodge
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fast
foods
to eat colossal amounts, and they can outweigh the all
advantages
because, eating fast
foods
can damage our health system, in my opinion, our health is the most important for us.
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