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In next centuries, people will not tend to buy both paper books and newspapers to read or learn. We will satisfy with reading e-books which will not require any money from us in these days. I believe that this type of reading that has got more advantages is more convenient to understand fast.

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next
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 centuries, people will not tend to buy both
paper
books
 and newspapers to read or learn. We will
satisfy
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 with reading
e-
books
 which will not require any money from us
in
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these days. I believe that
this
 type of reading that has got more advantages is more convenient to understand fast. On the one hand, some citizens think that
e-
books
 have
got
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many problems
belong
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belonging
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 to age
limit
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limits
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.
Firstly
, there are some adults who are under or older than 50 years old
cannot
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who cannot
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 read well. Because
,
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 older people who
has
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 used to read printed
books
 do not know much
using
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about using
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 devices. They reckon that the
paper
books
 that were published with
an
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amusing wallpapers and titles
as a result
 they say that they read newspapers and printed
books
 for these reasons.
On the other hand
,
e-
books
 have got more advantages for us.
Firstly
,
this
 will be not only cheaper than printed
books
 but
also
, hassle-free. Because of the effect on the Government`s
wealthy
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is that
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,
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 we will not
use
 any
paper
 for publishing
books
as a result
 no
paper
 will be used on
books
. We can spend money which was allocated for
books
 on nursing houses or schools. In detail, people tend to both read and understand fast
while
 they are reading
e-
books
 because of several reasons.
Firstly
, there are some options which are for setting a good environment to read well serve to us for reading without disturbing. In conclusion, in my opinion, we can
use
 our computers
in
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multi
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multiple
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 purposes in both study and work. We should
use to
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apply
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use
 artificial intelligence
while
 reading for some reasons which
was
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were
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 given
on
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at
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 the top.
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