Shopping is becoming more and more popular as a leisure activity. However, some people feel that this has both positive and negative effects. Why is shopping so popular? What effects does its increase in popularity have on individuals and on society?

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I think shopping is becoming more and more popular as a leisure activity.

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The Tree Plan Shopping

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biggest shopping

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center

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in Adelaide. I'm working

the

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take way

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takeway

shop in the T.T.P. Shopping

center

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. There

are

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huge

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a huge

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number of

coutner

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counter

working around in the

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center

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every day. Many

people

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buy lots of

foods

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food

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, drinks,

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clothes and They are

hand carry

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they

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put in the trolly.

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hand

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some

peple

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people

me only window shopping. I

sometime

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sometimes

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worry about

people

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who

bought

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many things into trolly, because I think

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they

are use

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are used

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anoney

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money

alot

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a lot

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some ladies who wear a looks expensive

juellies

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jellies

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. I have one friend who

bankenrupt his self

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bankrupted himself

, because he had

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expensive can,

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expensive cloth. etc. I think

bad

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effect is many loan

company

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companies

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estblished

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established

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those year

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People

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are easy to borrow money

trough

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through

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loan

company

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companies

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and easy to go to

bankalpt

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bankrupt

People

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must

concider

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consider

about when they go

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apply

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the

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apply

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shopping.

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before

buy

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buying

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something

people

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proust

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first

consider

about

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apply

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shopping

such

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as for yourself.

Serhii BaraniukSun Feb 11 2024

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supported main points

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relevant specific examples

You provided a real-life example from your personal experience working at a shopping center.

complete response

You have recognized both the positive and negative impacts of shopping, showing an understanding of the topic.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

178 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

leisure activity
consumer culture
emotional satisfaction
consumerism
advertising influence
online shopping platforms
sense of pleasure
social interaction
boost the economy
compulsive shopping
materialism
environmental degradation
unsustainable demand
social inequalities
status through possessions

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Shopping is becoming more and more popular as a leisure activity. However, some people feel that this has both positive and negative effects. Why is shopping so popular? What effects does its increase in popularity have on individuals and on society?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation’s history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by new ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress?

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?

Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

people say that crime reports on TV and newspaper have many disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?