The graph below shows the population of India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050.

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The line graph compares the populace in two Asian countries,

India

and

China

from 2000 and there is

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anticipation about the amount of growth in

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the next

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years

It is clear that

India

saw an upward trend from

beginning

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of the period and it will continue to grow in

predicted

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the predicted

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years

. Meanwhile,

China

had a steady growth until 2020 and it will decline slowly after that. At the beginning of the new

century

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China

was by far more populated than

India

with more than 1200 billion, on the other line,

India

only saw less than 1000 billion people

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the same time.

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continued until 2020 and after that time

China

is facing a slight decrease in population but

India

will encounter a rise until the end of the period. It has been anticipated that in 2030 and the next 20

years

Chinese population will remain steady at around 1400 billion,

by contrast

India

is going to have a significant increase in the same predicted

years

in future.

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The graph below shows the population of India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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