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The graph below shows the population of India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050.

The graph below shows the population of India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050.
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The line graph compares the populace in two Asian countries,
India
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 and
China
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 from 2000 and there is
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anticipation about the amount of growth in
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 50
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.
It is clear that
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India
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 saw an upward trend from
beginning
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 of the period and it will continue to grow in
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years
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. Meanwhile,
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 had a steady growth until 2020 and it will decline slowly after that. At the beginning of the new
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China
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 was by far more populated than
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 with more than 1200 billion, on the other line,
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 only saw less than 1000 billion people
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 the same time.
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continued until 2020 and after that time
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 is facing a slight decrease in population but
India
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 will encounter a rise until the end of the period. It has been anticipated that in 2030 and the next 20
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 Chinese population will remain steady at around 1400 billion,
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,
India
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 is going to have a significant increase in the same predicted
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 in future.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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