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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population inthe countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development

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In some countries around the world, few
people
 are moving to cities,
the
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 number of citizens
are
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is
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 reducing in the countryside
day-by-day
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. There are some merits of
this
 development, but in my opinion,
this
 can be negative for some key reasons. On the one hand, some
people
 believe that reducing the population of cities is useful for some
people
 who can buy
some
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both houses and things like fruit, bread, furniture or others
in
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 a cheaper
cost
 than
previous
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in previous
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 days because
,
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 less number of
people
 go to shops for shopping
as a
result
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result of
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 the
cost
 of all of
things
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the things
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 in
this
 city may be decreased.
Secondly
, the lifespan of some
people
 may increase because of the fresh air of
village
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the village
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. Everyone
know
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knows
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 that the air has a big role in our lifespan.
On the other hand
, others think that negative sites are more.
Firstly
, some public
places
 like
school
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schools
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,
museum
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museums
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,
factory
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factories
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 and others may be closed by the
governments
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governments'
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 requirement
as
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and as
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 a result we may see a reduction in both the number
job
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places
 and
amount
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the amount
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 of salary.
Secondly
, some of
negative
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 effects
was
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 found for
village
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the village
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 population because, in some villages colossal amounts of
people
 who lived in
city
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the city
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 moved there,
consuming
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and consuming
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 of some products amounts may be increased
as a result
 we may see an increase in the
cost
 of these products. In conclusion, I believe that
this
 is a negative
changing
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 for not only
people
 but
also
 the Government because,
while
 the
cost
 of some products
are
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has
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 been decreased, some job
places
 may be lost because of
closing
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the closing
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some
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of some
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 public
places
.
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coherence cohesion
Structure your essay clearly with separate paragraphs for each main idea. Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs to improve coherence.
task achievement
In your introduction, clearly state your opinion on the development to guide the reader. In the conclusion, succinctly summarize your arguments to reinforce your viewpoint.
task achievement
Support your main points with specific examples or evidence. This strengthens your argument and makes it more persuasive.
language
Use a variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to demonstrate your language proficiency. Avoid repetition of words and phrases.
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