Teachers in this modern era are unvalued by society than they were in the past. Do you agree or disagree?
There has long been a public debate about the fact that some experts think that
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I do not agree with this
theory and the reasons for my opinion will be discussed in this
essay.
In the modern world
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For instance
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the satisfaction
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usually are not satisfied. The same comparison was published by the magazine about citizens of rich countries with the best economic circumstances, they will not be cheerful because the world
is changing day by day societies need to be new and up to date.
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and its wealth index is enormous. People
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time and children there are studying 3-4 days a week and have more free time.
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To sum up
, there are always will exist
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people
who will not see the end of the path, they will find new different necessaries year by year. And it will not always depend on economic wealth.Submitted by dulskywork on
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Task Response
Make sure to directly address the essay topic in your introduction and throughout your essay. You've discussed economic development and satisfaction which is marginally related but not directly on topic about teachers' value in society.
Coherence & Cohesion
Develop a clear thesis statement that reflects your stance on the question and summarize your main points again in the conclusion to strengthen the overall structure.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use paragraphs to organize your ideas clearly. Each paragraph should have one main idea supported by examples or explanations. Ensure there is a logical flow between your paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Choose examples that are directly relevant to your main arguments. Make sure your examples specifically support the points you're making regarding the value of teachers in modern society.
