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Teachers in this modern era are unvalued by society than they were in the past. Do you agree or disagree?

#teachers #era #society
There has long been a public debate about the fact that some experts think that
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the economical
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economical
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 development and growth of every country around the
world
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 to create more satisfaction
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 their citizens. Without a shadow of a doubt, I believe humans are perfectionists
thus
 they always want more.
Therefore
 I do not agree with
this
 theory and the reasons for my opinion will be discussed in
this
 essay. In the modern
world
 money exerts the biggest value and impact
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 community lifestyle.
For instance
, several years ago the Times published an article about
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the satisfaction
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 of wealthy and
reach
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rich
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people
, some of them have achieved success, money or popularity and did it from scratch,
others
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while others
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 were born
in
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 a wealthy
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 and with an inheritance, but they
also
 worked a lot for being as an equal with
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 parent’s breakthroughs. And these
people
 usually are not satisfied. The same comparison was published by the magazine about citizens of rich countries with the best economic circumstances, they will not be cheerful because the
world
 is changing day by day societies need to be new and up to date.
However
, it is hard to deny that the
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 of
economy
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the economy
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 in rich countries does not affect
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all
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on
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individual’s life. One
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 of
this
 is Finland, which
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 the happiest nation in the
world
 and its wealth index is enormous.
People
 there spend more time with their families
instead
 of
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whole
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 time and children there are studying 3-4 days a week and have more free time. 

To sum up
, there are always will
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people
 who will not see the end of the path, they will find new different necessaries year by year. And it will not always depend on economic wealth.
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Task Response
Make sure to directly address the essay topic in your introduction and throughout your essay. You've discussed economic development and satisfaction which is marginally related but not directly on topic about teachers' value in society.
Coherence & Cohesion
Develop a clear thesis statement that reflects your stance on the question and summarize your main points again in the conclusion to strengthen the overall structure.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use paragraphs to organize your ideas clearly. Each paragraph should have one main idea supported by examples or explanations. Ensure there is a logical flow between your paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Choose examples that are directly relevant to your main arguments. Make sure your examples specifically support the points you're making regarding the value of teachers in modern society.
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