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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate how the Southwest Airport site is planned to be redeveloped next year.
Overall
, The plan for the future of The Southwest Airport site will be
improve
Wrong verb form
improved
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 more including the
departure
 and arrival gates and the facilities,
such
 as sky train, bag drop, shops, and ATM centre.
To begin
 with, there is an exit and entrance for
departure
 and arrival gates. At present, the passengers will see a check-in counter to the left and a
cafe
 to the right side after the
departure
gate
. After that, the passengers need to pass through passport security and control. The walkway will be visible after checking the passport. In the next year, the
cafe
 will be moved to the left side and the check-in
gate
 moved to the right corner of the
departure
gate
.
In addition
, the bag drop will be added next to the
cafe
 at the
departure
gate
.
On the other hand
, the arrival
gate
 will have more added facilities in the right corner,
such
 as a
cafe
, ATM, and car hire. In the future, the walkway will be replaced by a sky train.
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Make sure your introduction provides a clear overview of the changes to give the reader a comprehensive understanding from the start.
coherence cohesion
Try to use a variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly, improving the flow of your essay.
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Focus on detailing the differences between the current and future plans more clearly, use comparative language to highlight these changes effectively.
coherence cohesion
A concluding statement summarizing the main changes or stating the potential impact can make your essay more rounded.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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