Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and will use up the world’s resources. Do you agree or disagree?

In today’s world,
air
travel
plays
significant
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part in
traveling
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travelling
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, a growing number of
flights
are making money
to
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airlines but, on the other side, have an impact on the environment. I feel that restrictions should be imposed on
air
travel
.
To begin
,
all
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we
travel
by plane and can’t deny that it is very comfortable, but aircraft cause
of
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pollution,
for example
,
air
pollution; when plane fuel burns, it produces CO2
as well as
non-co2 emissions and
have
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an effect on
environment
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the environment
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. and when the aircraft take-off or landing makes some noise to people live near the airport.
moreover
, nowadays,
the
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airline
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airlines
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add
flights
for
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to
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respond to customer needs,
that
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which
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make
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makes
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noise more than before.
However
,
journey
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journeys
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by plane
spend
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less time on
traveling
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travelling
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, but, it’s
expensive
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than other ways of
travel
.
Hence
, if you
not
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stick
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have
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time maybe taking a train is
travel
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a travel
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options
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option
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and
take
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you can
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view
a
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countryside.
However
, the
air
is certainly the only fastest means of transport to fly across countries. So, it should be operated in
such
a way that its strengths can be taken maximum advantage of.
For instance
, by replacing old engines with cleaner ones. people can relieve the negative
effect
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effects
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caused by flying. In conclusion,
government
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the government
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should be considering
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the effect
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effect
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effects
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to
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on
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environment
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the environment
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and health, and find
way
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ways
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to solve a problem
such
as
add
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adding
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taxes to
flights
for harder
decision
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,
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and reduce
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reduce
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reducing
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flights
per day
include
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including
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the
passenger
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number of passengers
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must
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who must
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be more than half of the total so
it
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they
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will be
fly
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.
Additionally
, developing transportation
system
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systems
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such
a
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as
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sky train, train for
alternative
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an alternative
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one
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