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the bar chart below shows the most important causes of stress for different age groups in Canada. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the bar chart below shows the most important causes of stress for different age groups in Canada. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar
chart
 illustrates the major reasons
of
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for
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 stress for different ages in Canada. The data is available from 25 to 75 and more years.
Overall
,
people
 who with
age
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aged
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 75 and over years have more
own
Correct word choice
apply
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health
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
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 than
25
Correct determiner usage
those 25
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-54 years
.
Correct word choice
old.
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Although
Correct word choice
However
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, younger
people
 often
working
Wrong verb form
work
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 too much and exceed their
strength
Fix the agreement mistake
strengths
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. As
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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shown by the
chart
, not enough money
chart
 has
the
Correct article usage
a
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 minimal amount of stressed
people
 highest is 15%.
Interesting
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Interestingly
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,
that
Correct determiner usage
the
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 biggest percentage of stress in Canada (35, a bit more than 30)
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 no particular reasons. It means, that most
people
 are stressed for no
reasons
Fix the agreement mistake
reason
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.
Important
Add an article
The important
An important
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 thing to notice, age 55-64 for all four
chart
Change to a plural noun
charts
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 didn’t change
change
Remove the redundancy
apply
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a lot it
always
Add a missing verb
was always
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 ten or 17.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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