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The chart below shows information about different species of birds observed in Woodchuck Country at different times of the year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.

The chart below shows information about different species of birds observed in Woodchuck Country at different times of the year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.
The chart illustrates data about different species of
birds
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 which were noticed in Woodchuck County. The information is available at different times of the year.
Overall
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, as
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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shown
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is shown
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 by
chart
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the chart
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,
the
Correct article usage
apply
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most types of
birds
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 are observed in summer, only juncos
is
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are
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exception
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an exception
the exception
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.
However
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, there are 4 species of
birds
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 that
observed
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are observed
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 in winter (cardinals, crows, juncos and woodpeckers).
Hence
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, all
birds
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 are trying to fly to warm
place
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places
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.
Birds
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which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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known as juncos
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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stay
at
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in
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cold
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the cold
a cold
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place
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places
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.
While
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 bluebirds, mockingbirds, orioles,
vireos
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and vireos
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observed
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are observed
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 only in summer. And only 3 types of
birds
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 can live in both situations.
Interesting
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The interesting
An interesting
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 thing to notice
,
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apply
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 is that only one species of bird stay
at
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in
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cold
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the cold
a cold
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place
Fix the agreement mistake
places
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • species
  • observations
  • predominant
  • fluctuations
  • migration
  • habitat
  • seasonality
  • abundance
  • trends
  • data representation
  • year-round
  • population dynamics
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