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The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.

The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.
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The maps below illustrate an industrial place in Norbiton town and the future evolution of the area. Generally, the factories will disappear and a new circle will paved in the south of the maps. These changes will make the sectoral town into
resident
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 region.
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, it can be clearly seen from the images that all manufacturers will modify into houses. The farmland is going to relocate into the Northeast,
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 in place, where the farm is located now will add new residences with a bridge. On the east side of
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 chart playground and school will be erected. Playground between 2 households, school perpendicularly to the road from the central circle.
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, in the south, we can see a new medical centre and shops in front of residences, which is located in the west, in the future envelopment plan.
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, now we have one south road with three factories in the west.
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, the planned future development of Norbiton will adapted to people, it can decrease the population in another city
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 because the town will change for residence,
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 can help
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 country improvement.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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