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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Tables provide information about Five different countries
who
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that
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sales
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sold
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 their product in 1999 and 2004 .
Overall
,
Official
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the Official
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 fair
price
 for
Banana
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bananas
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 and Coffee in 2004
experiencing
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experienced
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an increased
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increased
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increase
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whereas
Denmark
 and
UK
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the UK
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was
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were
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 the country who get paid
in
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apply
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higher
price
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prices
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whike
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whereas
 Sweden was the least.
According to
 the data, in 1999 the higher
official
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officially
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 agreed fair
price
 for Coffee
is
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in
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 Switzerland
which is
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was
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 about 3
million
euros
. Following that,
Denmark
 and
UK
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the UK
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 almost shared similar
payment
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payments
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whereas
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with
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 the number calculated
by
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as
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 1.8
million
of
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apply
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euros
 for
Denmark
 followed by
UK
 1.5
million
euros
.
However
, Belgium only paid less
ammount
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amount
 of money.
On the other hand
, in 2004 the Fair
price
 for
UK
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the UK
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increase
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increased
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 dramatically to 20
million
of
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apply
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euros
 and Switzerland
increase
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increased
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thereefold
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threefold
 higher than before.
Moreover
, coffee
farmer
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farmers
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 in
Denmark
 after five years did not show
much
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as much
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 progression as
Belgium
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in Belgium
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 and Sweden. The number just increased by 2 % from the previous years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, denmark, uk, million, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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