The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. ,1191ummarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. ,1191ummarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table chart illustrates the statistics about the underground subway in six metropolitan cities, including their opening date, area,
passengers
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and passengers
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.
Overall
, it can be observed that
London
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the London
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metro
covered the most
track
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tracks
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while
Kyoto took the least length.
Further
, in terms of carrying
passengers
Tokyo's
metro
was ahead of other cities.
To begin
with, London's underground railway system was the first which was inaugurated in 1863 , had
taken
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a maximum journey , was 394km.It carried 775
million
commuters in a year which was in third rank. In the 18th century , the
metro
was opened up in Paris , and it covered 199km which was half the distance in comparison to London's
metro
.In terms of
passengers
, it took 1191
million
which was the second largest.In 1927, the underground railway station was facilitated in Tokyo ,where it had
the
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path of 155km,
however
,
passengers
had increased there , it was 1927
million
which was the highest as compared to other cities. Moving
Further
, in Washington DC , the subway was introduced in 1976, it took up a 126km road , which was larger than Los Angeles and Kyoto and when it comes to carrying travellers ,it took 144
million
per year.
Furthermore
,the
metro
was opened in Kyoto in the 1980s , Not only it covered the least radius (11km), but
also
carried the lowest number of masses (45
million
).
Finally
, in 2001, an underground railway system was added , it had a route of 28km and 50
million
individuals travelled per year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, metro, km, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • inaugurated
  • passenger throughput
  • network extensiveness
  • utilization rate
  • infrastructure
  • capacity
  • comparative analysis
  • disparity
  • ridership
  • underutilized
  • commuter density
  • historical significance
  • relatively recent
  • well-established
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