The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. ,1191ummarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table chart illustrates the statistics about the underground subway in six metropolitan cities, including their opening date, area,
passengers
.
Correct word choice
and passengers
Overall
, it can be observed that London
Correct article usage
the London
metro
covered the most track
Fix the agreement mistake
tracks
while
Kyoto took the least length.Further
, in terms of carrying passengers
Tokyo's metro
was ahead of other cities.
To begin
with, London's underground railway system was the first which was inaugurated in 1863 , had taken
a maximum journey , was 394km.It carried 775 Wrong verb form
took
million
commuters in a year which was in third rank.
In the 18th century , the metro
was opened up in Paris , and it covered 199km which was half the distance in comparison to London's metro
.In terms of passengers
, it took 1191 million
which was the second largest.In 1927, the underground railway station was facilitated in Tokyo ,where it had the
path of 155km,Correct article usage
a
however
, passengers
had increased there , it was 1927 million
which was the highest as compared to other cities.
Moving Further
, in Washington DC , the subway was introduced in 1976, it took up a 126km road , which was larger than Los Angeles and Kyoto and when it comes to carrying travellers ,it took 144 million
per year.Furthermore
,the metro
was opened in Kyoto in the 1980s , Not only it covered the least radius (11km), but also
carried the lowest number of masses (45 million
). Finally
, in 2001, an underground railway system was added , it had a route of 28km and 50 million
individuals travelled per year.Submitted by sarfaraz.zain619 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, metro, km, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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