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You are going away from home for one week and you need to ask your neighbour to look after you house. Why you want to go away What you want your neighbour to look after If there are any problems then give instructions

#home #week #neighbour #house #instructions
Dear Mr. Smith, I trust
this
 letter finds you in good health. The purpose of my correspondence is to formally ask for a
favor
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favour
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. Being a neighbour for
an
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almost five years now, I hope you will consider my request and help me. Allow me to elaborate on my situation. Yesterday, I received
call
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 from my father, and he mentioned that my mother is in hospital as she is suffering from malaria;
therefore
, I have booked my flights to Montreal for
one
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a
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week
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one-week
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 stay, and I am leaving tomorrow. If I had enough time to call my friends, I would not have disturbed you. But everything was so sudden, that I did not get
chance
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a chance
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 to contact my family or friends. As you know, I have two pets in my house. I would greatly appreciate it if you
can
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could
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 come twice
in
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a day and give them their food. I have already purchased all the necessary food supplements for both: my cat Kiki and my dog Jojo. You would just have to give them food and water for
this
 one week.
Additionally
, if you have time, please water my plants in
backyard
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the backyard
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. That would be a great help. I hope you will consider my request, and I am looking forward to your prompt response. Thank you, Mr. Patel
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coherence cohesion
Ensure your letter has a clear structure with distinct paragraphs for introduction, body, and conclusion for better coherence.
task achievement
Make your request more explicit by directly stating what you’re asking for early in the letter, improving task response.
coherence cohesion
For a richer cohesion, consider using a range of cohesive devices, like transition words or phrases that smoothly connect ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
Include more detail or specificity in your explanation to enhance task achievement, such as specifying the type of assistance you need or details about the care needed for your pets.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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