Teamwork offers a lot of benefits in modern society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In contemporary
society
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society,
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unity of
people
provides plenty of advantages. The benefits are like meeting new
people
,
advance
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your personal skills and eventually
enhance
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as a
team
. In
this
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I will demonstrate
positive
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the positive
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impact of
teamwork
to
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on
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modern society.
To begin
with
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with,
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the latter's point of view
teamwork
has a big advantage
such
as meeting new
people
and friends that can lead to a new level of partnership.
Moreover
, when you have new friends, you start being socially active. Many problems and difficult
obsticales
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obstacles
may be solved when you work as a
team
.
For example
, there are five
person
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people
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as
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in
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a
team
and each person can take one or two
task
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tasks
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to address the shortcomings which makes the whole process of
solution
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problem
more
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easier.
Teamwork
make
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makes
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people
cohesive and strong.
In addition
, I think that
teamwork
really helps you to grow personally and master your skills.
While
having a task to be solved you
substantually
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substantially
try to do your best in a bid to help your
team
and it makes you
to
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advance in your
particulat
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particular
field.
Furthermore
, it makes you better at your hard
amd
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and
soft skills.
For instance
, Cambridge University discovered that
teamwork
has a big positive benefit like self-grow. The more you put effort into something, the better result you achieve,
therefore
in
result
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a result
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you help your
team
. In conclusion, in modern
society
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society,
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teamwork
is crucial if something difficult needs to be solved.
The
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teamwork
not only
unite
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unites
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people
but
also
make
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makes
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them strong, better at something and cohesive.
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