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Band 5

Teamwork offers a lot of benefits in modern society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In contemporary
society
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society,
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 unity of
people
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 provides plenty of advantages. The benefits are like meeting new
people
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,
advance
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advancing
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 your personal skills and eventually
enhance
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enhancing
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 as a
team
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. In
this
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essay
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 I will demonstrate
positive
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the positive
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 impact of
teamwork
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to
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on
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 modern society.
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with
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with,
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 the latter's point of view
teamwork
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 has a big advantage
such
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 as meeting new
people
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 and friends that can lead to a new level of partnership.
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, when you have new friends, you start being socially active. Many problems and difficult
obsticales
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obstacles
 may be solved when you work as a
team
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.
For example
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, there are five
person
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people
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as
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in
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 a
team
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 and each person can take one or two
task
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tasks
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 to address the shortcomings which makes the whole process of
solution
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solving
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 problem
more
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apply
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easier.
Teamwork
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make
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makes
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people
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 cohesive and strong.
In addition
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, I think that
teamwork
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 really helps you to grow personally and master your skills.
While
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 having a task to be solved you
substantually
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substantially
 try to do your best in a bid to help your
team
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 and it makes you
to
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apply
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advance in your
particulat
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particular
 field.
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, it makes you better at your hard
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and
 soft skills.
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, Cambridge University discovered that
teamwork
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 has a big positive benefit like self-grow. The more you put effort into something, the better result you achieve,
therefore
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 in
result
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a result
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 you help your
team
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. In conclusion, in modern
society
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society,
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teamwork
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 is crucial if something difficult needs to be solved.
The
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teamwork
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 not only
unite
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unites
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people
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 but
also
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make
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makes
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 them strong, better at something and cohesive.

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Coherence & Cohesion
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Task Achievement
In your introduction, clearly state whether you agree or disagree with the statement to provide a clearer direction for your essay.
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