the chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph displays the obtained information from a survey which is about how people preferred to purchase and drink
coffee
in five cities in Australia in the
last
four
weeks.
Overall
it can be seen that going to a café to drink two caffeinated drinks,
coffee
and tea, is the most popular way in all cities except
Adelaide
.
While
using instant
coffee
is a bit more popular than drinking out for
Adelaide
, for
four
other ci4es is in second place Using fresh
coffee
is the least popular way in all ci4es.
also
, it can be seen that Melbourne is at the top of the list of
coffee
consumers in
this
graph and
Adelaide
is at the bottom of the list at all.
According to
the results, on the top of the list around 64
percent
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of Melbourne’s residents prefer to go to a café to drink
coffee
,
this
number for Hobart is around 63
percent
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, after that Sydney with 61
percent
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, and Brisbane with 56
percent
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are in the third and fourth places respectively.
Adelaide
with 48
percent
is in the
last
place. Looking at the graph around 54
percent
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of Hobart’s residents bought instant
coffee
which is the highest percentage in the
last
four
weeks
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there is Brisbane with 53
percent
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,
Adelaide
with 50
percent
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, and Melbourne with 48
percent
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respectively. Sydney with 46
percent
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has the lowest percentage of instant
coffee
consumption in the
last
four
weeks. 44
percent
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of Sydney’s people prefer fresh
coffee
, Melbourne with 43
percent
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and Hobart with 38
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are in
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third and fourth place.
this
number for Brisbane and
Adelaide
is 34
percent
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, four, adelaide, percent with synonyms.
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