The diagram shows the life of a special type of tuna fish.

The diagram shows the life of a special type of tuna fish.
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The diagram illustrates the life cycle of one significant type of
tuna
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fish
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.
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, the life cycle of
tuna
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fish
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consists of four main stages: egg, larva, juvenile,
adult
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and adult
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.
Planktons
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Plankton
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tuna
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swim by being transported by currents,
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nektons swim freely. The life cycle of
tuna
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fish
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begins when
tuna
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eggs are hatched, where they measure 1
micrometer
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micrometre
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. Afterwards, they live as larvae inside the egg sac
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reaching 4
micrometer
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and feeding on other organisms.
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, Larvae cannot swim freely, so they are transported by currents. Larvae turn into juveniles where they measure twelve
micrometer
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and start eating voraciously. After the
fish
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start shoaling, they are considered
adult
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adults
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. Adult
tuna
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migrates
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swimming freely In shoals. By external fertilisation, eggs are released from male and female mature tunas, and the entire journey is repeated all over again.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tuna, fish with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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