In order to become a successful sportsperson,some people argue that you need to have access to the latest technology and the most up-to-date euipment.Other people believe that these things are not necessary for sporting success. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays the
sports
field are
getting more and more competition and it tends to the enormous failure for the Correct subject-verb agreement
is
sports
persons.There are some people think
they need some new Correct pronoun usage
who think
technologies
to overcome the failure.But other thinks
to do well in skills.
Correct your spelling
things
To begin
with
the most number of Add a comma
with,
countries
developed their technologies
for sports
.As a result
that particular countries
got a tremendous result while
compared to the undeveloped Correct word choice
when
countries
.For instance
,China got more olympic
medals than other south Change the capitalization
Olympic
asian
Change the capitalization
Asian
countries
only because of their well developed
Add a hyphen
well-developed
technologies
.Moreover
to find
out new Change the verb form
finding
technologies
for sports
will help them to train a
best Change the article
the
sport
person for their country.In my Change the noun form
sports
opinion
Add a comma
opinion,
to develop
Change the verb form
developing
a
new Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
technologies
are much
Change the quantifier
many
essentials
to Fix the agreement mistake
essential
develop
better Wrong verb form
developing
athlets
.
Correct your spelling
athletes
However
some people Add a comma
However,
believes
that new Change the verb form
believe
equipments
cannot change that much of the result because the Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
sports
personn
who have better physical fitness Correct your spelling
person
persons
then
it will definitely help them to do well.Furthermore
some of them Add a comma
Furthermore,
believes
Change the verb form
believe
the
sportsmen who trust their skills more than the technology Correct your spelling
that
then
it definetly
help them to Correct your spelling
definitely
acheive
better Correct your spelling
achieve
position
in Fix the agreement mistake
positions
sports
.For example
,a lot of under developed
Correct your spelling
underdeveloped
countries
such
as African countries
like Jamaica were
performed so well.
Unnecessary verb
apply
To conclude
a lot of sports
the people who have relied on the stratagies
and Correct your spelling
strategies
technologies
were
have a Unnecessary verb
apply
high
chance Correct word choice
higher
to win
than the other believing persons.Change preposition
of winning
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