Some people hold that we should spend the amount of time and money on the protection of wild animals. Some people argue that they should be spent on human populations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people argue that the government should spend more money and time on the
proctection
of wild animals or on human populations.In my Correct your spelling
protection
prespective
, everything has its pros and cons,and we need to delve into both sides before forming any opinions.
Correct your spelling
perspective
To begin
with,human being is far superior that
animals.Change preposition
to
Therefore
,man kinds
always protect their own species first.Many believe that the money should allocated to healthcare systems, research and education because it Correct your spelling
mankind
help
to improve the Change the verb form
helps
socities
towards Correct your spelling
society
better
future.Correct article usage
a better
For example
,cancer has not cured
Add a missing verb
been cured
although
many scientiests
Correct your spelling
scientists
spend
Wrong verb form
have spent
decade
finding Fix the agreement mistake
decades
cure
for that.Add an article
a cure
As a result
,the public demand
Wrong verb form
demanded
on
more money to help the Change preposition
apply
reseacher
.
Correct your spelling
researcher
On the other hand
, animals are important as
to maintain equilibrium between human Correct word choice
apply
being
and ecosystems.Fix the agreement mistake
beings
For example
,if whaling activities still continuesly
active,Correct your spelling
continue
this
will altered
our oceans forever,negatively impacting the fish stocks Change the verb form
alter
to
those mainly Change preposition
of
depand
on living.Correct your spelling
dependent
Furthermore
,habitat destruction also
can leads
to climate change Change the verb form
lead
that
can Correct pronoun usage
which
bring
a negative impact on human Verb problem
have
being
.
In conclusion,both Fix the agreement mistake
beings
human
and mammals Fix the agreement mistake
humans
depand
on each other to maintain a Correct your spelling
depend
balance
ecosystem.I believe that it is reasonable to allocate the resources in balance to Change the verb form
balanced
benefits
both the balance human and other species.Wrong verb form
benefit
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