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The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the outcomes of the research on public purchases of
coffee
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 and tea among five cities in Australia (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, Hobart).
Overall
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, it can be observed that more than
three fifths
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three-fifths
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 of the population in given cities prefer to visit cafes for drinking,
while
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 fresh
coffee
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 buyers
accounted
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 for less than
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two fifths
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two-fifths
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. Analyzing the provided data, people in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart tend to go out more to have beverages. Following that, the statistical percentage demonstrates almost
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two thirds
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two-thirds
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 in all three cities. Instant
coffee
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 is the second most popular option for more than
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two fifths
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two-fifths
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 of the people.
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, the least interesting choice is buying fresh
coffee
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according to
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 the information. Turning to the other
two
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 towns, it can be indicated that the majority of the people who like to sip
coffee
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 and tea constitute
about
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apply
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less than a third of the total. Ultimately, the number of Australians choosing to buy instant
coffee
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 and enjoy drinking in restaurants is about fifty per cent.
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