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Some parents believe that reading books for entertainment is a waste of children’s time. They think that their children should read only serious educational books. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Some adults believe that children should read
books
, but only the ones that teach them serious lessons and morals of life because
otherwise
 - it’s a waste of
time
.
Meanwhile
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 the kids enjoy reading simple
books
 for fun more. In
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 I will discuss both views and state my opinion. One of
pros
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 of the reading
,
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 is that every genre of writing is useful for our imagination. It doesn’t matter what kind of book we are reading, because when we are reading any type of
literature
 we make up a view in our mind.
This
 makes our brain work on trying to create a proper picture and
this
 leads to the improvement of our imagination. Another reason why reading is not a waste of
time
 is because reading trains us to read faster and improve our language skills.
For example
, if students at school have a test which includes open questions or reading of some kind of text, they will need their reading skills. If a person is not used to reading they won’t be able to understand the text properly and might interpret it in their own way which could lead to misunderstandings or bad grades. One of the cons of reading unserious
literature
 is that if a person has very limited free
time
 in their daily life, they might need to use it
on doing
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 something useful
instead
 of reading
books
 that are not classical. Easy
books
 keep us entertained but the knowledge we gain from them is often lower than the one we would gain from
books
 like Shakespeare’s “Romeo and Juliet”.
This
 provides us only with entertainment
instead
 of
further
 progress. Another con is that some
books
 are quite expensive so spending money on less educational
literature
 might do us no good. Of
course
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 people should buy and read
books
 they enjoy but if these
books
 don’t contain a strong value
this
 could end up as a waste of your money and
time
 (especially if you don’t like the book after finishing it).
To conclude
, all kinds of
literature
 help us improve our language and general knowledge so I believe that even regular children’s
books
 can teach a lot.
Submitted by oimigle on

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Task achievement
Expand on your arguments with more specific examples to strengthen your position. While your essay does discuss both views, adding more distinctive examples will clarify and reinforce your points.
Coherence and cohesion
Strive to ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that all sentences within it are cohesive, focusing on a central argument. Utilize connecting words seamlessly to enhance the flow of ideas.
Coherence and cohesion
While your introduction and conclusion are present, aim to make your thesis statement clearer in the introduction. Likewise, ensure your conclusion succinctly summarizes your opinion and the core arguments presented.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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