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The table below gives an information about UK independent films. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives an information about UK independent films. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Looking at the table below , a piece of information about different genres of independent films in the UK in 2012 can be seen. It provides information about a
number
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 of
releases
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 in comparison with the percentage of earnings which was received from ticket
sales
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.
To begin
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number
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 of
releases
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 and gained profit by that sort of film.
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,
Drama
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the Drama
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 and Documentary categories had a similar
number
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 of
releases
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,which was 35,
however
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 , their income was dramatically different ,which was 8.3% and 2.9% of total ticket
sales
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 respectively.
In addition
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, Comedy films took second place
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 the
number
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 of
releases
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,which was 26 ,
in contrast
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, their percentage of wage received by
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 was almost half of
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(45.4). Looking more closely, the table provides us with information that Horror and Thriller films show quite a similar pattern
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 the
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 of
releases
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 - 14 and 13 of a total 148, but
while
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 Horrors brought one-fifth of 100% of the income, Thrillers were almost the most unsuccessful from
this
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 point of view (only 1.3%).
On the other hand
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, there was the Romance genre,which indicator of ticket
sales
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 was the lowest and accounted for only 0.8% of the total.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, releases, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independent films
  • box office earnings
  • genre
  • budget
  • dramatic increase
  • niche market
  • experimental cinema
  • diversification
  • profitability
  • audience interest
  • investment in film industry
  • low-budget films
  • high-budget films
  • release trends
  • performance metrics
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