The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how much of the
population
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in four different Asian countries
have
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has
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been living in
cities
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for over 20 years and
predict
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predicts
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how it will change during the following decades. In general,
it is clear that
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the percentage of the
population
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living in
cities
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for over 20 years keeps growing and slightly fluctuating.
Moreover
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, Malaysia's percentage of
population
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was the highest among other countries.
Malaysia
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and Indonesia in the first period about 30% and 10% of
total
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the total
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population
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were living in
cities
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, respectively
Then
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,
the
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both trends rose slightly until 1990,
they
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when they
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reached 43% and 21%. In 2020, the city
of
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apply
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population
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in Malaysia skyrocketed
around
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by around
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80%,
while
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Indonesia only peaked at 55 %
population
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. Their trend will continue increasing over the following year.
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Thailand
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In Thailand
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and
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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, at the beginning of the period almost 20% and 30% of residents were located in
cities
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.
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Although
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in 1990,
Thailand
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and
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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moderately increased around 10% and 20% of citizens.
While
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in 1990 to 2020,
Thailand
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was
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levelled off at 25 % of
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population
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the population
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. Meanwhile, the
Philippines
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moderately declined to 40% in 2010.
After
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this
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,
Thailand
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and
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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increased again and
is
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are
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predicted to get to roughly 45% and 54%
at the end
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periods.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, cities, thailand, philippines with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moderately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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