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Task 1: Supermarket Plan The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Task 1: Supermarket Plan The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The map illustrates the establishment of a new supermarket with two proposed sites for a new supermarket in
Garlson
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Garrison
.
Overall
, the
town
 has
population
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a population
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 of 65000 people and includes essential areas
such
 as
countryside
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the countryside
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, housing, and industrial
area
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areas
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. The first site is located out of the
town
 in the countryside,
whereas
 the second one is just in the middle of the
Town
 Centre.
To begin
,
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the houing
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houing
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housing
 area is observed from on the north and on the south sides of the
town
, placing the
Town
 Centre in between them.
Additionally
, the
Town
 Centre is surrounded by industrial space representing the largest zone of Garlson. Even though
industrial
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the industrial
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 area is quite big, the countryside
suprpasses
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surpasses
surpassed
the
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its
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 size of it placing side one from the north-west side of the city.
Moreover
, a main road
streches
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stretches
 from the south-east to the
north west
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northwest
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 and connects Cranson (population 29.000) which is 25 km away from Garlson and Hindon (10.000 population), located at a distance of 12 km.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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