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In future, vechicles will be driverless. The only people travelling inside will be passengers. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvanges.

Artificial
interlligent
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intelligence
intelligent
technology
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 has become highly developed in
this
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 modern world.
Autonomus
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Autonomous
technology
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 makes
driverless
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vehicles
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 for travelling which has both positive and negative effects. As far as
Iam
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I am
 concerned, I believe that the advantages outweigh the
disadventages
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disadvantages
 and will explain the reasons in
this
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 essay.
Driverless
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 cars,
bussess
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busses
buses
 and trucks create
wide
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a wide
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varieties
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variety
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 of positive impacts on society.
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,
people
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 can entertain the
total
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entire
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 journey without considering
sign posts
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signposts
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,
speed
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the speed
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 of the
vehicle
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,
traffic
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or traffic
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 congestion.
Therefore
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, these factors provide travelers more time to focus
the
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on the
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 surrounding environment when they are
on
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in
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vehicle
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a vehicle
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.
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, if
people
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 plan their tour destination and update it through the system of
of
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driverless
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vehicles
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, they do not need to check the maps and locations frequently because those
vehicles
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 reach the exact location in a safe manner.
Secondly
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,
autonomus
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autonomous
vehicles
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 are not affected by physical
constrains
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constraints
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 which humans experience. That means,
mostly
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most
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people
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 get
distruction
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destruction
 by physical
exhaustions
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exhaustion
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 and mental instability which lead to poor driving control and few individuals
end-up
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end up
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 with accidents.
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, if an individual drives
in
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at
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 a high speed with the thought of family problems, it can lead to detrimental effects like loss of
lif
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life
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 of that person and damage to the
vehicle
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 caused by accident.
In addition
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,
people
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 who have
physical
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a physical
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 and mental disability and
incapable
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are incapable
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on
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of
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 driving including elders can get benefit from new
driverless
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technology
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while
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 travelling.
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However
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However,
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 the trust
of
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in
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those
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that vehicle
those vehicles
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vehicle
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are
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is
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 less
due to
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 safety issues and unexpected weather and road conditions which need
man power
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manpower
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 to decide and run in various situations.
Inconclusion
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In conclusion
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, despite of few trust issues,
driverless
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 cars,
busess
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buses
busses
 and trucks provide entertainment and
safty
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safe
 travel which are
usefull
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useful
 for each and every one including
physical
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physically
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 and
mental
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mentally
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 disability
induviduals
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individuals
. In my view,
people
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 have to trust the new
technology
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 and encourage it to acquire
usefullness
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usefulness
.

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Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, work on developing your examples further to more directly relate them back to the question. This involves making sure every example supports the argument of advantages outweighing disadvantages in a more explicit manner.
Task Achievement
For clarity and comprehensive idea development, ensure each paragraph opens with a clear topic sentence that directly relates to the question. Follow this with elaboration and example that reinforce the initial claim.
Coherence and Cohesion
In coherence and cohesion, focus on improving the flow between ideas within paragraphs and between them. This can be achieved by using a wider range of linking words and ensuring each paragraph follows logically from the one before.
Coherence and Cohesion
To make your main points better supported, integrate more statistical data, real-world examples, or expert opinions. These details can add depth and credibility to your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Pay attention to spelling and grammar to improve your coherence. Misspellings and grammatical errors (e.g., 'bussess' instead of 'buses', 'induviduals' instead of 'individuals') can detract from the reader's ability to understand your points.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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