In future, vechicles will be driverless. The only people travelling inside will be passengers. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvanges.
Artificial
interlligent
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intelligence
intelligent
technology
has become highly developed in this
modern world. Autonomus
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Autonomous
technology
makes driverless
vehicles
for travelling which has both positive and negative effects. As far as Iam
concerned, I believe that the advantages outweigh the Correct your spelling
I am
disadventages
and will explain the reasons in Correct your spelling
disadvantages
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essay.
Driverless
cars, bussess
and trucks create Correct your spelling
busses
buses
wide
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a wide
varieties
of positive impacts on society. Fix the agreement mistake
variety
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, people
can entertain the total
journey without considering Correct word choice
entire
sign posts
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signposts
speed
of the Correct article usage
the speed
vehicle
, traffic
congestion. Correct word choice
or traffic
Therefore
, these factors provide travelers more time to focus the
surrounding environment when they are Change preposition
on the
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in
vehicle
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a vehicle
For instance
, if people
plan their tour destination and update it through the system of of
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apply
driverless
vehicles
, they do not need to check the maps and locations frequently because those vehicles
reach the exact location in a safe manner.
Secondly
, autonomus
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autonomous
vehicles
are not affected by physical constrains
which humans experience. That means, Correct your spelling
constraints
mostly
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most
people
get distruction
by physical Correct your spelling
destruction
exhaustions
and mental instability which lead to poor driving control and few individuals Fix the agreement mistake
exhaustion
end-up
with accidents. Correct your spelling
end up
For example
, if an individual drives in
a high speed with the thought of family problems, it can lead to detrimental effects like loss of Change preposition
at
lif
of that person and damage to the Correct your spelling
life
vehicle
caused by accident. In addition
, people
who have physical
and mental disability and Add an article
a physical
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are incapable
on
driving including elders can get benefit from new Change preposition
of
driverless
technology
while
travelling.
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of
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in
those
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those vehicles
vehicle
are
less Change the verb form
is
due to
safety issues and unexpected weather and road conditions which need man power
to decide and run in various situations.
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manpower
Inconclusion
, despite of few trust issues, Correct your spelling
In conclusion
driverless
cars, busess
and trucks provide entertainment and Correct your spelling
buses
busses
safty
travel which are Correct your spelling
safe
usefull
for each and every one including Correct your spelling
useful
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physically
mental
disability Change the word
mentally
induviduals
. In my view, Correct your spelling
individuals
people
have to trust the new technology
and encourage it to acquire usefullness
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usefulness
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