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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The picture below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

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The diagram illustrates the plan of a
musem
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museum
 in 1998 and after some
changes
were happened
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 in 2008. The following
parragraph
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paragraphs
paragraph
 will summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and
make
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 comparisons where relevant. The most noticeable
changes
 took place in the West section of the building. First of all, there was a shop opened just to the left of the entrance, where in 1998 the temporary
exhibition
 room was situated.
Also
 ,there was a room for bags and coats situated in the South-West unit of the hall. The garden
are
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was located in the
center
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 of the museum.
However
, there
are
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were
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 some
changes
happened
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that happened
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 in 2008.
Due to
 some
changes
 the garden area was into 3 and
seperated
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separated
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into as
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as
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a
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 cafe sitting area and some fountains
are
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were
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 placed. A little bit of permanent
Exhibition
 rooms are converted into temporary
Exhibition
 rooms and some
area
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areas
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 are replaced as
restaurant
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restaurants
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.
overall
, the museum has been changed and modernised drastically. Notably, the permanent
exhibition
 room was reduced.
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task achievement
Ensure your introduction adequately paraphrases the task question, and offer a clear overview of your report in the beginning to guide the reader.
coherence cohesion
Work on developing clear and distinct paragraphs for each set of changes (by year, or by section of the museum), which will help in organising your ideas more effectively.
task achievement
While you mentioned some comparisons, including more explicit comparisons (such as sizes, distances, or the significance of changes) can enhance the clarity and relevancy of your examples.
coherence cohesion
Avoid spelling and grammatical errors by proofreading your report. For example, 'musem' should be 'museum', 'parragraph' should be 'paragraph', and ensure proper punctuation and conjunction use to enhance readability.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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