The bar chart below shows the number of students who enrolled in three courses a private institute in India from 2000 to 2015.

The bar chart below shows the number of students who enrolled in three courses a private institute in India from 2000 to 2015.
The bar graph illustrates the figures of pupils who registered in three different courses at non-government
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organizations
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in India between 2000 and 2015.
Overall
, it can clearly
see
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that there
were
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a
dramatical fluctuate
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in nursing,
pharmacy
and
physiotherapy
in
the
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most of the period given. Comparing
between
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pharmacy
and
physiotherapy
, the number of
students
who enrolled in
physiotherapy
was higher than
pharmacy
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in pharmacy
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in 2010, but after five years
pharmacy
became more than
physiotherapy
.
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, as
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regards
to
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nursing, it
was reach
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its peak at nearly 95% in 2015,
whereas
in 2005 it was at
the
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lowest point at 20%. There was a sharp descended in the percentage of
students
who
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registered
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in nursing from approximately 55% to 20% in the first five years.
In addition
, the number of
students
who
register
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in
pharmacy
was
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declined
upto
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up to
2000 (70%) to 2005 (about 41%) . If we compare
between
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physiotherapy
and nursing, in 2005, the majority of
students
enrolled was
physiotherapy
at about 81%,
while
nursing was
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second common one at around 20%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pharmacy, physiotherapy, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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