Some people think that city planner should consider creating more green spaces and planting trees, while others argue that they should focus on building new homes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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task achievement
Work on structuring your introduction more clearly. Be sure to present both views before stating your opinion.
coherence & cohesion
Utilize paragraphing effectively to separate your ideas clearly. Each paragraph should represent one main idea or argument.
coherence & cohesion
Pay attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar. Errors can make your essay difficult to understand.
task achievement
Expand on your examples to better support your points. Show how specific examples of green spaces or flat accommodations benefit the community.
task achievement
Include a balanced discussion of both views before concluding with your opinion to fully address the task.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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