the table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

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The given table compares the

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of people living in

the

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poverty

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in six different types of

family

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families

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in Australia during the year

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1999. From the given table,

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the total percentage of

Australian

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Australians

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in six different family types that lived in

the

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apply

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poverty

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was 11%, with the sole parent as the highest proportion and aged couple as the lowest. During the given period, the sole parent category (21%)

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the highest percentage of

family type

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families

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that lived in

poverty

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. Followed

with

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sole

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parent category (21%) as the

second,

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and the single individuals with no children (19%) as the third.

On the contrary

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, the couple with no children (7%) was one of the categories with the least proportion living in

poverty

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along with

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the single aged person (6%).

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, aged couple was the least family type that lived in

poverty

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, with

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percentage of only 4%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words poverty with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

150 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

proportion
categories
families
poverty
single-parent
childcare
income
couples
dependents
older adults
pensions
unemployed
financial resources

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the table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

In many countries, more money is spent on transport system in the cities. In contrast, very little is spent in rural areas. What are the effects of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook)have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society?To what extent do you agree? In the current world, The usage of technology is constantly on the rise.