The diagram shows how leathers products are made.

The diagram shows how leathers products are made.
The diagram illustrates the way in which leather products are made.
Overall
, there are 11 stages in the process, beginning with drying the animal
skin
and culminating in manufacturing leather goods.
To begin
, animal
skin
is hung on a line in order to be dried under the sun for a few days. The dried
skin
is
then
delivered to a factory using a truck. In the factory, the
skin
is washed in a vat containing water and lime so as to remove all the dirt. Once
this
stage is completed, the washed
skin
is soaked in another vat containing an alkaline solution (lime) in order to remove all the hair, fats, and greases. After that, the soaked
skin
is flattened using a flattening machine. In the following stage, the flattened
skin
is soaked in Tannin, which is a mixture of water and vegetable matter to preserve the
skin
. The
skin
is
then
polished by using a roller to make it shine.
Finally
, the
skin
is transported to a factory where leather goods
such
as bags, shoes, and balls are made.
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