The diagram shows how leathers products are made.
The diagram illustrates the way in which leather products are made.
Overall
, there are 11 stages in the process, beginning with drying the animal skin
and culminating in manufacturing leather goods.
To begin
, animal skin
is hung on a line in order to be dried under the sun for a few days. The dried skin
is then
delivered to a factory using a truck. In the factory, the skin
is washed in a vat containing water and lime so as to remove all the dirt. Once this
stage is completed, the washed skin
is soaked in another vat containing an alkaline solution (lime) in order to remove all the hair, fats, and greases. After that, the soaked skin
is flattened using a flattening machine. In the following stage, the flattened skin
is soaked in Tannin, which is a mixture of water and vegetable matter to preserve the skin
. The skin
is then
polished by using a roller to make it shine. Finally
, the skin
is transported to a factory where leather goods such
as bags, shoes, and balls are made.Submitted by s_syedy on
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