The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area fo britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show hoe it was distributed.

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The numerical table illustrates

way

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a way

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of earning

money

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for the police

budget

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in 2017 and 2018,

while

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the charts compare expanding

this

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money

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on three different porpuses in those years.

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, it is readily apparent that the

budget

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dedicating

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to the police increased in 2018 by about 14 million pounds and in both years the biggest part of the

money

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has been expended on officers's and staff's salaries.

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, in 2017, the number 175.5m

reveal

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that

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a significant amount of the police

budget

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provided

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was provided

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the Narional

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Narional

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National

Government,

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the rest of the

money

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has been

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earned from Local Taxes and Other sources, which are 91.2 and 38 million pounds

repectively

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respectively

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, 75%

dedicated

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were dedicated

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to salaries and 17% to Building

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apply

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transport,whilst less than others paid out on Technology -just 8%.

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with

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a slight

climbing

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climb

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in 2018, 177.8m

absorbed

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was absorbed

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from

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National

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the National

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Government and 102.3m from Local Taxes.

Moreover

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apply

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this

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year

also

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just a tiny

budget

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achieved

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was achieved

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from Other sources(38.5m).

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last

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year,17% of the

money

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was spent on Building and transport, but Technology

climbied

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climbed

to 14%.

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, most of the

money

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again has been expended on salaries

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, budget, m with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

191 words

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The most important of science should be to improve people's lives. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?.

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You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email •Give details of your purchase •Describe the problem •Explain why you need a replacement urgently

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that to benefit the development of a child, the mother and father should take parenting classes. To what extent you agree or disagree with this statement?