The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area fo britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show hoe it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area fo britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show hoe it was distributed.
The numerical table illustrates
way
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of earning
money
for the police
budget
in 2017 and 2018,
while
the charts compare expanding
this
money
on three different porpuses in those years.
Overall
, it is readily apparent that the
budget
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to the police increased in 2018 by about 14 million pounds and in both years the biggest part of the
money
has been expended on officers's and staff's salaries.
Firstly
, in 2017, the number 175.5m
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that
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a significant amount of the police
budget
provided
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was provided
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by
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the Narional
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Narional
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National
Government,
while
the rest of the
money
has been
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earned from Local Taxes and Other sources, which are 91.2 and 38 million pounds
repectively
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respectively
.
In addition
, 75%
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to salaries and 17% to Building
an
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transport,whilst less than others paid out on Technology -just 8%.
Secondly
,
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a slight
climbing
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in 2018, 177.8m
absorbed
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from
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National
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the National
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Government and 102.3m from Local Taxes.
Moreover
in
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this
year
also
just a tiny
budget
achieved
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from Other sources(38.5m).
As well as
last
year,17% of the
money
was spent on Building and transport, but Technology
climbied
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climbed
to 14%.
Furthermore
, most of the
money
again has been expended on salaries
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