The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area fo britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show hoe it was distributed.
The numerical table illustrates
way
of earning Add an article
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the way
money
for the police budget
in 2017 and 2018, while
the charts compare expanding this
money
on three different porpuses in those years.
Overall
, it is readily apparent that the budget
dedicating
to the police increased in 2018 by about 14 million pounds and in both years the biggest part of the Wrong verb form
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money
has been expended on officers's and staff's salaries.
Firstly
, in 2017, the number 175.5m reveal
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budget
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the Narional
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Government, Correct your spelling
National
while
the rest of the money
has been
earned from Local Taxes and Other sources, which are 91.2 and 38 million pounds Wrong verb form
was
repectively
. Correct your spelling
respectively
In addition
, 75% dedicated
to salaries and 17% to Building Add a missing verb
were dedicated
an
transport,whilst less than others paid out on Technology -just 8%.
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Secondly
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with
climbing
in 2018, 177.8m Replace the word
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absorbed
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was absorbed
from
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by
National
Government and 102.3m from Local Taxes. Correct article usage
the National
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in
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apply
this
year also
just a tiny budget
achieved
from Other sources(38.5m).
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was achieved
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year,17% of the money
was spent on Building and transport, but Technology climbied
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climbed
Furthermore
, most of the money
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