In today's
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age, Numerous individuals strive to imitate prominent characters by constantly watching them on social networking sites or reading about them in magazines. The prime factor behind Correct word choice
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and success via social media and materialistic things in the time ahead. I will explicitly explain whether it is a good or bad idea in the subsequent paragraphs.
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To begin
with, globalising technology has brought thousands of opportunities and freedom to people's lives. People, with the means of social media, can access whatever they want to attain or be in life, thereby getting influenced by these so-called celebrities to some extent and would like to be one of them. Linking Words
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, many end up chasing role models in order to have the ultimate attention, affection and success the way their role models Linking Words
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For instance
, a girl from the United States tried to imitate a self-made billionaire Kylie Jenner by completely changing from make-up, and hairstyle to dress-up which she later on went viral and Linking Words
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popularity Wrong verb form
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for
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. Henceforth, fame and attention in Correct pronoun usage
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contemporary society often make them feel more like Remove the article
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main character to some extent.
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Furthermore
, hankering after the materialistic world has been commonplace.They want to attain valuable assets, secure Linking Words
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and live a luxurious lifestyle for real. Correct pronoun usage
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Although
chasing renowned celebrities seems to be cool and extravagant to some crowds it eventually denigrates their mental and emotional well-being, leading them to serious conditions called depression and anxiety disorder. Linking Words
For example
, In 2017, An Iranian girl wanted to look exactly like her celebrity crush Angelina Jolie and had undergone multiple surgical procedures on her face which in turn got botched and completely destroyed her natural face. Linking Words
Thus
, obsession and compulsive disorder certainly Linking Words
leads
to a horrible situation in life and it is better to just be ourselves rather than copying others.
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, several Linking Words
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are following affluent personalities just to achieve fame and success and have materialistic things in life. Change to a plural noun
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However
, it has drastically damaged people's mental and emotional health.Linking Words
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