The bar charts below describe the weekly hours worked by people in four Scandinavian countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below describe the weekly hours worked by people in four Scandinavian countries in 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graphs
shows
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the number of working
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spent by people in four different countries every week in 2002. In general, most people in Denmark, Sweden, and the UK spent more than 36
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up
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to 40
hours
while
the majority of France workers spent 31 to 35
hours
.
To begin
with, 70% of Denmark people
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36 to 40
hours
, followed by about 20% of them
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31 to 35
hours
in
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every week to work. 80% of workers in Sweden had up to 40 weekly
hours
while
nearly
of
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40% of them spent at least 31
hours
and ended up in 35
hours
. In the UK,
a
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half of
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the British
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spent 36 to 40
hours
in seven days to earn money. Meanwhile, 50% of citizens in France put their time to work for 31 to 35
hours
, but
approixmately
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approximately
35% of them did it for more than 36
until
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40
hours
.
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