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The companies and individuals should pay to clean pollution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#companies #individuals #pollution
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There is a lot of
an
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intensive debate about
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environmental issues nowadays.
However
, a category of people
argue
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 that all combatants of
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society must take serious stages to combat pollution
whereas
 others go
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a nother
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 direction. Literally, l coincide completely with the initial view. On one side,
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numerous
of
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experts believe that
the
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pollution is a disaster which
treated
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 the existence of universal.
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, these days we notice
a
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more
of
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climate changes in the
world
 ,
in addition
 to
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nother
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other
 problems like a huge
raise
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of
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 temperatures and the global warming phenomena. What is more,
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scholars discuss
this
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 dangerous consequences after a lot of
researchs
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research
 and invite all society ( individuals,
associate
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) to take
this developments
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this development
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 in their accounting and use the clean energy rather than the power which is used today.
In addition
,
this
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 groups are
sound
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 the alarm,
the
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world
 will become extinct unless the governments and United
nations
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 organizations
formulation
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 laws and regulations which contribute to
protect
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 the planet.
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,
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nother
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other
 categories go beyond that protection of the environment are not their business.
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,
this
 gathering invoked the companies working
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gas
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 field employed
a billions
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billions
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 of people and liquidation of these companies will lead to unemployment.
Furthermore
,
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huge number of countries surrounding the
world
,
his
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economic
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 are based on
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fuel , and cancelled
the
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work in
this
 field may lead
also
 to poverty and wars. The
world
 can avoid the
environment
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environmental
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 conditions through several substitute methods which
are
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 not require terminating the work of these companies.
To sum up
, we notice today a lot of the
environment
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 conditions which
is
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clearly
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 to everyone and
consider
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 a serious threat to exist of the earth. So , the governments, organizations and all the members of
civilians
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 society should make more and more efforts to avoid
this complex problems
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this complex problem
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. The
later
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 view is unjust and only
defend
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 their financial interests, so I agree that the
world
 must use
the
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clean energy rather than
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traditional power.
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