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The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000.

The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000.
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The pie
chart
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 provides data on
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usage
usages
 of
water
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 in the world, and the bar
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 indicates
water
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 used in four different countries (China, India, New Zealand and Canada) in the year 2000.
overall
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, it can be seen that the highest percentage of
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 was used for industrial purposes throughout the world,
while
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 the proportion of
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 used in all countries was equal. Looking at the pie
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 data sets in more detail, it is evident that the percentage of
water
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 used for industry was higher than
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 purposes, at 70%.
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 22% of
water
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 went
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 domestic sectors, and Agriculture was the sector which consumed 8% of
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 over the 1-year period. Turning to the bar
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 data sets in more detail,
it is clear that
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 the percentage of
water
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 used by people in all countries was the same proportion in 2000, which starts
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 0% and ends
with
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 100% in agriculture,domestic and industry.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "sets" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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