Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea.Some people think they should be banned.Do you agree or disagree. Give examples for your answers.

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soil suffer from using shopping
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that are made of
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. Many individuals urge that it should be prohibited. I completely agree with the statement because it has
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impact on these sectors,
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with, there are many reasons why
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carry
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are dangerous for our environment. From the land perspective,
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is a thing that
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not spoiled. When people drop
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on land , it stays for years and years without
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, soil
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the loss
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of fertiliser problem which leads to damage
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where crops are cultivated. It not only
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the amount of harvest but
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create
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economic problems.
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as a country which dependent on agriculture they are suffers from
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decline problem. For those detrimental effects, the governing body
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to take steps like banning
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bags
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, as we can see from the
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level pollution perspective from
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bag waste, nowadays it is very widely shown that messes
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often
throw
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bags
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in
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the
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without thinking negative effects
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it
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behaviour marine life suffers more unexpected
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, a survey demonstrated recently that
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sea level
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animals eat
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, and
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, they have died because it is not digested. If
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bags
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not
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demolished from society, we will face a number of problems in future. In conclusion, unlike other environment-friendly
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,
plastic
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shopping
bags
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are not safe for land and
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those are cheap compared to others, In my opinion from an
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perspective
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should be removed.

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Task Achievement
Your essay addresses the topic directly and you show a clear stance on the issue. However, you should work on fully developing your ideas and providing a more detailed analysis. Consider adding more specific examples and a more comprehensive explanation of the impacts of plastic bags on the environment.
Coherence and Cohesion
The organization of your essay is generally clear, but there are issues with how your ideas flow from one to the next. Use a wider range of cohesive devices and paragraphing more effectively to improve the logical flow of your text. This will help the reader easily follow your argument throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay would benefit from a clearer introduction and conclusion. In the introduction, clearly outline what you will discuss. In the conclusion, briefly summarize your main points and restate your opinion. This structure helps to frame your essay and makes your argument more persuasive.
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