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Band 5

Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler?

Individuals travelling rate is increasing nowadays in comparison to the past. Income source is considered
as
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the major reason behind
this
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 scenario; it helps in exploring the world and spending some quality
time
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 with the family members. The prominent reason behind
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in
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to
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 travelling is that
as
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the trend of blogging on
the
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social media
such
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 as Instagram and Facebook is rising which was not present in the past.
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, when bloggers visit new destinations and show the
surrounding
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, it attracts
higher
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 number of people
along with
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 more money for them.
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, Lee Minh Ho have 45.6 million followers on Instagram and whenever he visits Korea or any new place in
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the U.S
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U.S
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U.S.
, he starts
live
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 telecast as many masses join his live video; he earns more money
accordingly
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. The primary benefit of travelling, every individual
have
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 a hectic schedule and they try to
free-up
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 some
time
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 for travelling
,
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 so that they can spend some quality
time
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 with their family members.
This
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 helps them to strengthen their relationships and relax their mind. Moving
further
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 with another advantage, travelling proves to be an excellent source of exploring new cultures and languages. When individuals visit
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new geographical areas as
tourist
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tourists
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, they get to know more about the native
people
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people's
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 lifestyle.
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, in 2018, Prime Minister Justin Trudeau travelled to Golden Temple, Punjab, India and learnt a lot about the Sikh community.
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, travelling in today’s era is increasing extensively
due to
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 being a good income source for people, but along
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this
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 spending
time
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 with near ones and exploring more about the world are
also
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 of great advantage.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Globalization
  • Professional development
  • Social media platforms
  • Exotic locations
  • Cultural exchange
  • Personal growth
  • Adaptable
  • Open-minded
  • Mental health
  • Daily routines
  • Responsibilities
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