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Some people think that few lanaguages die is not important.It makes people's life easier.Agree disagree

#people #lanaguages #life
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every year.Some humans believe
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 crucial,they think life will be elementary
,
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if there are fewer languages in the world. I partially agree
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 opinion and my arguments will be
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in
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 the following paragraphs.
One
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 the
one
 hand,I agree that
people
 don’t have to learn another
language
.To be more specific when some human beings travel to another country they can communicate easily
to
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others
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.
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,
due to
 knowing,
speaking
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and speaking
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 the same
language
 populations can travel alone to another country.
One
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 the other hand,all individuals
speak
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 the same languages have detrimental effects.To give an example
people
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language
 is important for their country,
people’s
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 specifications.
As well as
die
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one
language
 it means that, die all
people
, nationality and
culture
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.Another detrimental effect
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old
people
 who
life
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 and speak their
language
 suddenly
to
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die their
language
 is caused
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 -connection to society .Old
people
 cannot learn easily
other
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another language
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language
,their brain
also
getting
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oldest
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their
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than their
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body
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. In conclusion,
although
 I believe that unique
language
 in all the world is comfortable for humans,I
also
 hold the view to die
language
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deleting
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 both specifically and notional above the world.
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