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Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#politicians’ #lives #newspapers
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It is thought that news ought not to share
the
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personal information
of
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about
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politicians
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'
lifes
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lives
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. I totally agree with
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 statement because I believe
politicians
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also
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 have the same
rights
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 as other celebrities
have
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and in order
them
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for them
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 to perform their jobs as professionals, their image should be protected in citizens' perception.
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Right
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 to keep
one
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's private
life
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 to oneself is
one
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 of the most easy-to-break
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right
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rights
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 of fundamental human
rights
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 and
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media
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the media
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 usually do not think of
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wrongdoing
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 when they publish something that shows the details of some famous person's
life
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, especially
politicians
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'.
This
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 is because elements of the
media
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 usually try to reach their maximum profit, as many
people
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, and they usually ignore their work ethics
while
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 they try to do
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, and
this
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 results a confusion between their work ethics and their way of earning money.
For instance
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, many magazine newspapers use their headline or
fornt
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front
 pages to publish details of the celebrities, and
this
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 is the same as
ragular
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regular
 ones using these places to give information about celebrities of the political
life
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, and they both end up breaking the
right
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 to have
private
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a private
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life
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.
However
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, some of the famous
people
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of
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in
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 the
media
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 are able to say that
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right
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 of
them
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theirs
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 has been broken by the
media
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,
politicians
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 do not usually have the luxury to say
this
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 because there is a common misbelief that
politicans
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politicians
 represent the will of citizens and
therefore
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 it is citizens'
right
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 to have complete
knowladge
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knowledge
 of their
lifes
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lives
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. I strongly disagree with
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 point of view because
politicians
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 are
also
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 human and they have the
fundamental
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same fundamental
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rights
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 as others
have
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and
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this
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 situation should not be argued as it is
one
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 of the fundamental
rights
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.
Politicians
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 would lose their chance to perform their
job
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jobs
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 as professionals
,
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 if their image
on
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in
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the
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society is regulated by
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media
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the media
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.
This
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 is because
people
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 tend to see the shocking details of someone's private
life
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 as their whole identity
,
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 and confuse their private
life
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 with their performance as
politicians
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.
For example
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, Burk Tativa, who is the Prime Minister of Economic Relations in Switzerland, considered the best economist in various terms,
forced
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 to quit his career as a politician just because he lost a large amount of his investment, as an individual, in some enterprice. I think that
one
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's
act
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actions
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 in their
life
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is totally consider
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one
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's private
life
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 and
does
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do
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 not give any information about
one
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's career as
politician
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a politician
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.
To conclude
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, what political identities do in their
lifes
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lives
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 should not be subject to newspapers because of the human
rights
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 they have as individuals and the effects of the illusion of
those kind
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that kind
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 of news on
people
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intrusion
  • accountability
  • transparency
  • sensationalism
  • privacy
  • public interest
  • collateral damage
  • precedent
  • responsible journalism
  • exploitation
  • democratic processes
  • media culture
  • balance
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