Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is thought that news ought not to share
the
personal information Correct article usage
apply
of
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about
politicians
' lifes
. I totally agree with Correct your spelling
lives
this
statement because I believe politicians
also
have the same rights
as other celebrities have
and in order Unnecessary verb
apply
them
to perform their jobs as professionals, their image should be protected in citizens' perception.
Change preposition
for them
Right
to keep Correct article usage
The right
one
's private life
to oneself is one
of the most easy-to-break right
of fundamental human Change to a plural noun
rights
rights
and media
usually do not think of Correct article usage
the media
this
type of wrong doing
when they publish something that shows the details of some famous person's Correct your spelling
wrongdoing
life
, especially politicians
'. This
is because elements of the media
usually try to reach their maximum profit, as many people
, and they usually ignore their work ethics while
they try to do this
, and this
results a confusion between their work ethics and their way of earning money. For instance
, many magazine newspapers use their headline or fornt
pages to publish details of the celebrities, and Correct your spelling
front
this
is the same as ragular
ones using these places to give information about celebrities of the political Correct your spelling
regular
life
, and they both end up breaking the right
to have private
Add an article
a private
life
. However
, some of the famous people
of
the Change preposition
in
media
are able to say that this
right
of them
has been broken by the Correct pronoun usage
theirs
media
, politicians
do not usually have the luxury to say this
because there is a common misbelief that politicans
represent the will of citizens and Correct your spelling
politicians
therefore
it is citizens' right
to have complete knowladge
of their Correct your spelling
knowledge
lifes
. I strongly disagree with Correct your spelling
lives
this
point of view because politicians
are also
human and they have the fundamental
Correct word choice
same fundamental
rights
as others have
Unnecessary verb
apply
and
Correct word choice
apply
this
situation should not be argued as it is one
of the fundamental rights
.
Politicians
would lose their chance to perform their job
as professionalsFix the agreement mistake
jobs
,
if their image Remove the comma
apply
on
Change preposition
in
the
society is regulated by Correct article usage
apply
media
. Correct article usage
the media
This
is because people
tend to see the shocking details of someone's private life
as their whole identity,
and confuse their private Remove the comma
apply
life
with their performance as politicians
. For example
, Burk Tativa, who is the Prime Minister of Economic Relations in Switzerland, considered the best economist in various terms, forced
to quit his career as a politician just because he lost a large amount of his investment, as an individual, in some enterprice. I think that Add a missing verb
was forced
one
's act
in their Replace the word
actions
life
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
is totally consider
Change the verb form
is totally considered
one
's private life
and does
not give any information about Correct subject-verb agreement
do
one
's career as politician
.
Add an article
a politician
To conclude
, what political identities do in their lifes
should not be subject to newspapers because of the human Correct your spelling
lives
rights
they have as individuals and the effects of the illusion of those kind
of news on Change the determiner
that kind
those kinds
people
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