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the chart below shows the amount of beer sales in Saigon between 1970 and 2010

the chart below shows the amount of beer sales in Saigon between 1970 and 2010
the
chart
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 below shows the
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amount
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number
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 of
beer
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sales
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 in
Saigon
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 between 1970 and 2010 the
chart
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 below shows the
amount
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 of
beer
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sales
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 in
Saigon
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 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
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 below shows the
amount
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 of
beer
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sales
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 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
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 below shows the
amount
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 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
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 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
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 below shows the
amount
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 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
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 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
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 below shows the
amount
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 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
Use synonyms
 below shows the
amount
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 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
Use synonyms
 below shows the
amount
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 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
Use synonyms
 below showsthe
amount
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 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
Use synonyms
 below shows the
amount
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 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
Use synonyms
 below shows the
amount
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 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
Use synonyms
 below shows the
amount
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 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
Use synonyms
 below shows the
amount
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 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
Use synonyms
 below shows the
amount
Use synonyms
 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
Use synonyms
 below showsthe
amount
Use synonyms
 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
Use synonyms
 below shows the
amount
Use synonyms
 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
Use synonyms
 below shows the
amount
Use synonyms
 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010the
chart
Use synonyms
 below shows the
amount
Use synonyms
 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010 the
chart
Use synonyms
 below shows the
Use synonyms
amount
Change the quantifier
number
show examples
 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010 the
chart
Use synonyms
 below shows the
Use synonyms
amount
Change the quantifier
number
show examples
 of
beer
Use synonyms
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Saigon
Use synonyms
 between 1970 and 2010

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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, amount, beer, sales, saigon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 20 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 18 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 20 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend analysis
  • Sales figures
  • Societal context
  • Economic environment
  • Consumer behavior
  • Market shifts
  • Spikes and drops
  • Peak sales
  • Marketing efforts
  • Population growth
  • Brand introduction
  • Economic downturn
  • Legislation changes
  • Health trends
  • Market evolution
  • International brands
  • Consumer preferences
  • Global trends
  • Local markets
  • Distributors
  • Broader economy
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