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The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London.

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London.
The given line chart introduces the number of
commuters
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 in the London Underground Station during the day.
According to
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 the data, the number of people between 6 am and 10 am was almost the same as over the period 4
pm
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 to 8
pm
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. It is noteworthy, that the figures during the afternoon and in the evening fluctuated. Looking at the details more closely, there were 100 passengers at 6 am and 4
pm
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. Comparing these two time periods, the number of
commuters
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 rapidly increased and reached the highest points of the day at 8 am and 6
pm
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 - 400 and 380 people respectively.
Then
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, there were sharp declines which comprised 180 passengers at 10am and 125
commuters
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 at 8pm. The information in the graph reveals, that after 10 am the level of London Underground Station users gradually rose and amounted to about 280 passengers at 12 sharp.
In addition
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, between midday and 2
pm
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, the figures remained steady.
However
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, during the next two hours, there was a steep decrease, making 100 people at 4
pm
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. Regarding the period from 8
pm
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 to 10
pm
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,
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apply
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slight upward and downward trends are seen, resulting in 140
commuters
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words commuters, pm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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