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MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information ba selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information ba selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
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The graph below
represent
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 statistics about certain
countries
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countries'
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residence
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residences
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 pf overseas in Australia.
Overall
,it is evident that
Indonesia
 has the biggest numbers,
while
 Hong
kong
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 and Malaysia have the smallest ones. To commence with
Indonesia
 had
gradual
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rose
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 in the
started
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 point, which made up around 2,
while
 Hong
kong
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Kong
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 had
significant
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 grown , which accounted for 7, respectively.
Then
 there
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were
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considarable
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considerable
considerably
rose
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 for
Indonesia
 , which comprised 10,
while
 Hong Kong had fluctuation until the end of
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statistics
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statistic
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. When it comes to Malaysia, there was
stable
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 trend, which accounted for 10 at the start and
then
 had a fluctuation which made up approximately 17, respectively.
According to
 the graph, Singapore had
considarable
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considerable
considerably
grown
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, which accounted for 10 at the starting point,
then
 there was
decline
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 trend, which comprised around 20, respectively. It may be concluded from the graph that international students from countries
such
 as
Indonesia
 and
singapore
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Singapore
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 showed
biggest
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the biggest
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numbers
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number
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 of
residence
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residents
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pf
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of
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 overseas in Australia.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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