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The diagram below show the process for recycling plastic battles.

The diagram below show the process for recycling plastic battles.
#show #process #plastic #battles
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The diagram illustrates the
process
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 of
the
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apply
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recycling
plastic
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 bottles.
This
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process
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 has 9 stages,starting from collection to the production of a new product. As seen from the diagram,the consumers need to sort out type of the materials before throwing
into
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them into
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 the rubbish bin.Next,the recycle truck will collect the
plastic
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 bottles and send
to
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them to
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recycle
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the recycle
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centra
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centre
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 to be sorted out by the workers.
Following
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this
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,
compress
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a compress
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process
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 will take place.The plastics will be compressed into the big blocks.
After
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this
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,The blocks are
being
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crushed into
the
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pieces before being washed .
The next step is
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 that pieces of
plastics
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plastic
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 will have to
put
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be put
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 in the machine to produce
plastic
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 pellets
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then
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and then
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direct
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directly
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procced
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proceed
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 to
heating
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the heating
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process
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.The raw materials are
being
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produced
as a result
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 of heating
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then
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and then
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be send
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sent
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 to the factories to produce new products.
Overall
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,recycling of
plastic
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 bottles
need
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needs
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 both human and machine to work.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, plastic with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • recycling process
  • collection
  • consumers
  • facilitating
  • disposing
  • environmental benefits
  • reduction
  • conservation
  • resources
  • challenges
  • efficiency
  • effectiveness
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