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Neighbours are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbour?

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Our life is surrounded by society and
it is clear that
 every day
people
 have conversations, small talks with
neighbors
 and other types of communication.
It is clear that
 we build our social environment
attending
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 a university, an office or just a gym.
However
, we forget that our
neighbors
 are not just
people
 who live next to us because they achieve our loyalty gradually. We see them almost every day, have small talk from
time
 to
time
, they probably know our family etc.
That is
 why it is highly important to define what Is the best neighbor. Personally, I am convinced that there are so many possible situations when great
neighbors
 make sense.
For instance
, you are ill and going outside for some pills is impossible
due to
 your condition.
Hence
,
people
 who live
the
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next door to you can be highly useful and important in
this
 period of
time
. They can easily buy some treatment during their walk from the office, so kind and intelligent
neighbors
, who live next to you, can be the most necessary
people
 when you feel under the weather.
Moreover
, I highly appreciate smart
people
 because if your environment
have
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has
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 a lot of knowledge and
such
 a progressive mindset, the way of thinking changes significantly. Having free
time
 it is really pleasant to pull your
neighbors
 together for a cup of tea or just for
a
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dinner.
Thus
, kind
people
 can make your everyday life more cheerful and
colorful
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 and I think it is really rare to have interesting
people
 next to you. All in all, there are so many great treats of character and a lot of things, which we want to see in our neighbor, but in fact it is simpler
that
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than
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 we think. Living in peace with yourself without any night parties,
loud
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or loud
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 screams is really cool. When you have
people
 next to you, who can help you in hard
time
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times
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 is the peak of luck and you need to appreciate it.
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task achievement
Ensure the introduction clearly states what qualities you believe make a good neighbour, followed by distinct paragraphs each focusing on a specific quality.
coherence & cohesion
Try to use a wider range of cohesive devices (e.g., however, furthermore) to link your ideas more effectively across the essay.
coherence & cohesion
Incorporate a concluding paragraph that summarizes your main points and clearly restates your view on the qualities of a good neighbour, enhancing the overall structure of your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respectful
  • Trustworthiness
  • Helping hand
  • Personal space
  • Open communication
  • Friendliness
  • Approachability
  • Cleanliness
  • Orderliness
  • Participation
  • Communal bonds
  • Vigilant
  • Aesthetics
  • Amicably
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