The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram illustrates the way a hydroelectric power station can produce
electricity
.
Overall
, there are two process
cycle
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distributed in
a
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the
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day
and
night
stages
. The
water
flows
downward in the
day
,
while
the
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in the
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night
stage
is
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the
water
flows
back. In the beginning
stages
of the
day
, the
water
from a river
detain
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is detained
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in the high-level reservoir. Afterwards, the dam can be
open
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and the
water
flows
to generate
electricity
.
Then
, the
electricity
stored
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is stored
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by
generator
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the generator
a generator
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. Next stage, the power station distributed
electricity
to the national grid by power lines. In the
last
, the
water
stored
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by the
low level
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low-level
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reservoir.
On the other hand
, the
water
in the
night
stages
flows
back to start to the first position on the
day
stages
.
Moreover
, the turbine pumped back the
water
to a
high level
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high-level
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reservoir
while
closed during
night
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the night
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. The
water
is stored in the up level and
flows
down again.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, day, night, stages, water, flows with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • turbine
  • generate electricity
  • transmit
  • low-level reservoir
  • high-level reservoir
  • dam
  • cycle of electricity production
  • energy storage
  • flowing water
  • sustainability
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