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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram illustrates the way a hydroelectric power station can produce
electricity
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.
Overall
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, there are two process
cycle
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cycles
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 distributed in
a
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the
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day
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 and
night
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stages
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. The
water
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flows
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 downward in the
day
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,
while
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the
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in the
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night
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 stage
is
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apply
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the
water
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flows
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 back. In the beginning
stages
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 of the
day
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, the
water
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 from a river
detain
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is detained
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 in the high-level reservoir. Afterwards, the dam can be
open
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opened
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 and the
water
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flows
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 to generate
electricity
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.
Then
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, the
electricity
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stored
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is stored
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 by
generator
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the generator
a generator
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. Next stage, the power station distributed
electricity
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 to the national grid by power lines. In the
last
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, the
water
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stored
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is stored
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 by the
low level
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low-level
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 reservoir.
On the other hand
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, the
water
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 in the
night
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stages
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flows
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 back to start to the first position on the
day
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stages
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.
Moreover
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, the turbine pumped back the
water
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 to a
high level
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high-level
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 reservoir
while
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 closed during
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night
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the night
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. The
water
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 is stored in the up level and
flows
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 down again.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, day, night, stages, water, flows with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • turbine
  • generate electricity
  • transmit
  • low-level reservoir
  • high-level reservoir
  • dam
  • cycle of electricity production
  • energy storage
  • flowing water
  • sustainability
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